| Author | Message | ||
| M. Kathryn Black
Senior Member Username: kathryn Post Number: 2644 Registered: 09-2002 |
Palette This void is the color of bleached bones on a quartz beach. The ocean reflects a hazy white sky and only the foam gathers. I walk the washboard sand; I am alone. If I could see myself, red, yellow, blue, I might dare to mix rainbow pigments– bring back the trees and heather, cast an orange tint across the clouds, reveal sun light streaming over birds and water, laugh at a fiddler crab guarding its nest, then I would paint you walking towards me in purple, green, and orange, opposites attracting. (c)2005 | ||
| Kathy Paupore
Advanced Member Username: kathy Post Number: 2314 Registered: 12-2003 |
Kathryn, I really like this. From no color to all colors. Esp. the opposites attract.  K | ||
| Tim
Intermediate Member Username: voices Post Number: 379 Registered: 08-2004 |
nice real change in emotion throughout being the dark person i am i thought s1 was the best | ||
| Jim Doss
Senior Member Username: jimdoss Post Number: 1765 Registered: 12-2003 |
Kathryn, Well done, as usual. I like the "washboard sand"... and the artist on the beach painting out her fantasies. Jim My books are available at http://www.lulu.com/jimdoss. Visit The Loch Raven Review at http://www.lochravenreview.com. | ||
| Dan Cox
New member Username: dcox56 Post Number: 20 Registered: 08-2005 |
Kathryn, This is lovely. The white/blank images in S1 are very effective. I like your use of color: at once, playful in the images color can create, and serious in that the piece deals with our very basic emotional responses and relationships to the colors around us. | ||
| M
Board Administrator Username: mjm Post Number: 4834 Registered: 11-1998 |
Very lovely to start with a blank canvas and then start to paint for the reader, Kathryn. We do that often in verse, but you have done it literally with the color you inject slowly into this piece. I could almost feel it come alive right before my eyes. Nice decision to choose colors that are opposing on the color wheel. This adds much dimension to the two personalities without giving a lot of detail. | ||
| LJ Cohen
Moderator Username: ljc Post Number: 2668 Registered: 07-2002 |
Kathryn, This is a lovely piece. Wonderful use of contrast and color to evoke emotion. The first verse, my favorite--white the clor of loneliness. Well done. best, ljc http://ljcbluemuse.blogspot.com/ | ||
| Emusing
Moderator Username: emusing Post Number: 1531 Registered: 08-2003 |
It's the best kind of love poem Kathryn. S2 and S3 really brought it home. E | ||
| M. Kathryn Black
Senior Member Username: kathryn Post Number: 2645 Registered: 09-2002 |
Kathy, I'm pleased you like this. I remember artists painting on the beach when I was young. Thankyou. Tim, I'm sort of a dark person, too, but decided to mix moods in this piece. Thanks. Jim, walk on that too much and you get achy feet. Thanks alot! Dan, Thankyou very much; I enjoyed your comments. M, Thankyou. I used to paint and do other types of art (collage, etc) alot, but then I got into the writing full time. This is my way of keeping my mind in it. Lisa, Thankyou, too. The first verse was the most challenging, but I like it, too. E, Thankyou for the compliment. I think it's hard to write original love poems. My best to everyone, Kathryn | ||
| Laurie Byro
Advanced Member Username: lauriette Post Number: 1153 Registered: 11-2003 |
yes, the first strophe is my favorite as well, lovely poem beginning to end congrats on a deserved HM laurie | ||
| M. Kathryn Black
Senior Member Username: kathryn Post Number: 2658 Registered: 09-2002 |
Laurie, Thankyou very much! Best, Kathryn |
